Friday, February 20, 2009

Free Write: My Perfect Vacation

My perfect vacation would be to go to Disney World. That would really be the perfect vacation. We would fly all the way to Orlando Florida and stay at a beautiful resort and just living life. It would be so fun because aside from me and my family going to Florida, I would have some friends also. Those people would be; Loni, Jaylah, Erica, Dashina, Anjee, Dianne, Kesa, Ashley, and my male friends Aki, Bazir, James, and Marcus. What I would plan for us to do is to go on all of the rides that might be scary, go swimming of course, and above all go shopping! I could see if I can reserve the pool, and then all of the children could have a pool party (that I would be in charge of) while the adults are out having their own fun. That would really be the perfect vacation!!





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